Feedback on my poem pleaseee?

beauty lies beneath


a green leaf


sores in the blue sky


the golden sun will never deny


happiness to flow


across your mind


beautful glow


perfectly lined


flowers casade around


amazingly tall trees


high above the ground


hope for this to never cease


as the coulds seem


to create your most prized dream

Feedback on my poem pleaseee?
beautiful. I love it.
Reply:It's good. The language is very deep and it's obvious there's a good amount of thought in it. However, it could use some punctuation so it does not sound all blobbed together.
Reply:makes me think...
Reply:You need to develop some reading habit .


You need to have punctuation and rhyming patterns.You have got a good head read some books on philosophy.you are certain to succeed.


I would recommend you to read Rabrinath Tagore,Ben Jonson and William Blake.
Reply:Well, I like some of the ideas you have presented here, though the rhyming pattern is off. Try writing in stanza's this may help further develope the style you are attempting.
Reply:I like it. It is uplifting and touching that part of me that wants to be in nature with an attitude of gratitude for all of life.